First Draft: Script Feedback

Criteria for script feedback

Get feedback from at least one peer (other student)

• Be more descriptive of the locations and the surroundings
• Add in more shots of Freddie riding the bikes

Get feedback from Tom and Barney (questioning)

• Change the lettering from all upper case letters
• Add in External and Interior Locations
• Be more descriptive of your shots (mid shot, panning)
• Add in as and when music fades in and out (if applicable)

Concentrate on script as an instruction for filming/filmmaking

Think about:

1. How to shoot
2. What does the film look like?
3. How to edit
4. How to sound design
5. Graphics
6. Technique and storytelling

What does the audience need to know?

• Freddie's history and what sparked his initial interest in bikes
• Whether he continues to ride today
• How riding affected his life - positive/negative - was were his successes/failures?